12/14 – Negotiations
So, one of the things I cut from an earlier draft was this scene where Fer decides not to come to the set because he’s behind on Emerald Justice work. Greg would assume he could just point the camera at the actors and do just as good a job, except he didn’t white balance and the focus was blurry, so they would have to redo the entire day’s work, causing the actors to get pissed off with him. Greg and Vanessa would then take it out on Fer, who would walk out on the project and chapter eleven would end with them not having him or his camera.
But it made those two feel too unsympathetic, at least to me, so I changed it to the ending you saw while Molly gets some payback and walks off in chapter twelve. I personally think it works better, but you tell me what you think.
I’d say it worked best, considering characters Fer seems pretty duty bound where as Greg seems feels to be A-grade asshole and Vanessa A-grade bitch so Fer continuing work and Greg&Vanessa fighting each other came pretty natural
And of Molly as pretty much against movie in first place, and mostly worked good for it due David (and success made with Davids work being biggest middlefinger to Greg&Vanessa was her big motivator in set)
I’d probably respond with a “Wait, what?” after that syntax error, as well.